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The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the percentage of greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the percentage of greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.
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Energy
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 is one of the most important things that every
humans
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human
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need
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needs
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 in their life.
There's
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There are
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 a lot of things that need
an
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apply
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energy
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 to
used
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be used
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, especially in
huge
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a huge
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country
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countries
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 like Australia. In Australia,
energy
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usually
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is usually
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 used for
household
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households
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. Most people need the
energy
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 in their own household for
diffrent
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different
 things.
Nevertheless
Linking Words
,
for
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to
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 validate the database, there's a chart
shows
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showing
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 how
energy
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 is used
an
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in an
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 average Australian household. Australians mostly use the
energy
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 for cooking, lighting, refrigeration, and stand in
a
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apply
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little consumption. Well, it's normal for Australians
use
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to use
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 that, because they
spent
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spend
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 the
energy
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in
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on
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 a huge scale for heating and cooling and water heating, and
also
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 other appliances
becauseit
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because it
can be used for life
sustainbility
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sustainability
. If the
energy
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 that they used too much, it can
produced
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produce
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 a gas
in
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apply
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over scale. From the chart, heating and cooling
is
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are
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 the
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most things
mostthings
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most common things
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 in Australia
Correct pronoun usage
that produced
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produced
Wrong verb form
produce
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 the gas
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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