he charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
The given charts indicate data on the place and categories of
classes
young people in the city of Australia are attending Use synonyms
at
now. Change preposition
apply
Overall
, the pie Linking Words
chart
illustrates the type of Use synonyms
dance
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classes
; Use synonyms
additionally
, the bar Linking Words
chart
shows how many people attend each Use synonyms
class
.
The Use synonyms
given
pie Verb problem
apply
chart
claims that the Use synonyms
majority
of Use synonyms
classes
are located in private studios Use synonyms
at
48 Change preposition
apply
percent
. Change the spelling
per cent
Additionally
, in Linking Words
the
second place are community halls and others at a rate of 18 Correct article usage
apply
percent
. Change the spelling
per cent
subsequently
in the lowest rate, college-based Linking Words
students
at 10 Use synonyms
percent
.
The bar Change the spelling
per cent
chart
recognizes the Use synonyms
majority
of Use synonyms
groups
under 11 attending ballet Use synonyms
classes
—nearly 600 persons; Use synonyms
on the contrary
, the Linking Words
majority
of Use synonyms
groups
aged 11–16 attend modern Use synonyms
dance
calls at number over 500. The loes attending Use synonyms
classes
in Use synonyms
groups
under 11 are what modern calls 300 Use synonyms
students
. In the opposite group, age 11–16, the least attended Use synonyms
dance
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class
is ballet Use synonyms
at
nearly 300 Change preposition
with
students
. Tap Use synonyms
dance
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class
is Use synonyms
second,
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which
The group under 11 attended approximately 450 Correct pronoun usage
apply
students
, ages 11-16, and 400 Use synonyms
students
at Use synonyms
this
typo Linking Words
class
.
In conclusion, the pie charts show the location of Use synonyms
Use synonyms
dance
Correct article usage
the dance
class
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and
It seems that the Correct word choice
apply
majority
attend private studios, and bar char recognizes ballet Use synonyms
dance
is more popular in Use synonyms
groups
ages 0–11; Use synonyms
on the contrary
, 11–16 age Linking Words
groups
attend modern Use synonyms
classes
.Use synonyms
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