The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.
The line graph illustrates the period between 2011 and 2018 with the
new
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opened and closed shops in one area in those 7
years
Overall
, 2 lines have overcome each other all the time, and the leader is not exactly seen despite some
years
.
In
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one
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hand, the closures that were less in 2011 had indexes a bit more than 6
thousand
,
whereas
the openings were with eight
thousand
and five hundred.
However
, in the next 3
years
, they had six, seven, and almost the same indicator. So they have
overcame
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the opposite line for almost 2
thousand
except the
last
2014. Starting in 2015, the situation was similar.
For example
, in 2015, closures had reached the lowest indicator with 500, meanwhile, the opposite had 4000. The period of 3
years
after has a minimum of openings with 3
thousand
as a result
, leader on closings with 5
thousand
continuously.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words years, thousand with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • decline
  • surge
  • stabilize
  • correlation
  • economic conditions
  • consumer behavior
  • technological advancements
  • urban development
  • employment
  • retail sector
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