It has become easier and more affordable for people to travel to other coutries. Do you think it is a positive or a negative development? Give your opinion and relevant examples from your experience

Most of the
people
love travelling and explore
countries
for various reasons.
This
includes experiencing a different culture, meeting new
people
, exploring a new place and
enjoy
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enjoying
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the
cusines
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customs
specific to a country. Over
the
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time, it became easier for
people
to travel to other
countries
. In my
opinion
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opinion,
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it is a positive development and the below essay explains my
view points
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viewpoints
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and relevant examples. First of all, majority of the
people
love to visit places which they have
been
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heard about or they
wanted
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to experience things which are different from their daily lives.
Older
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In older
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days, there was
limitation
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a limitation
the limitation
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on the number of
countries
they
can
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visit. After
countries
started making larger
income
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incomes
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from tourism, more
countries
started offering tourist
visa
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visas
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which
people
can
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use for
the
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site
visit
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.
Secondly
, many developed
countries
offer student
visa
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visas
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and employment opportunities for skilled candidates.
For instance
,
now a days
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nowadays
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many
students
travel from India to
countries
like
US
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the US
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and Canada
for pursuing
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to pursue
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their
Masters
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.
Also
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post the programs, the
students
are getting
opportunity
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the opportunity
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to work in these
countries
which
help
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the individuals to grow
futher
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further
in their field and make
the
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more
independednt
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independent
.
This
has a positive effect as the
students
are getting more exposure and employment opportunities.
On the other hand
, these
countries
charge a higher fee amount from foreign
students
through which the country
also
getting
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gets
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benifited
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benefited
.
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