The graph below shows information about the recruitment of teachers in Ontario between 2001 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows information about the recruitment of teachers in Ontario between 2001 and 2007.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The figure illustrates the information about the employment of educators in Ontario between the
years
2001 and 2007.
Overall
, the percentage of English-language
teachers
dramatically decreased
while
the percentage of French-language
teachers
almost remained the same after 6
years
. The ratio of
teachers
, who speak French, increased almost to the start point, which was 70%, in 2003 after decreasing to just over 50% in 2002. The percentage of French-language
teachers
fluctuated over 4
years
,
then
it increased to over 70% in 2007.
On the other hand
, English-language educators had over 70% in 2001.
However
, it dramatically decreased to 40% in two
years
. That drop continued to under 30% in 2007, after slightly increasing to just over 45% in 2005. In 2001, the percentages of
the
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French-speaking
teachers
and English-speaking
teachers
were almost the same
with
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around 70%. It can be seen that the differences between them widened by almost 50% in 2007.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, teachers with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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