Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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There is a conflicting perspective between advertising
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people
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to buy some goods and the other
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that the exposure of the advertising
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them disregard the information. I side with the
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who think that promotion
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to drive
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to buy products. Nowadays, we are
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huge and
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massive information
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both offline and online,
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advertisement
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and advertisement
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is one of them.
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information that happened regularly stimulated
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to be overwhelmed, thereby they
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the
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.
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, when we access articles
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online media, we normally
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by
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endorsement
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endorsements
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, pop-up ads and so on,
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unconsciously we
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are likely
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to skip them or close them.
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,
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an algorithm
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that
read
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reads
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our personal
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interests
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can take our consciousness to read one of a ton of
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advertisement
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advertisements
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and
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consume their product. The competition between other goods to serve our needs made the company
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give their creativity to gain customers’ attention to
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opting
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their
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for their
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product.
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Advertisement
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not
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become massive, but the campaign
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also
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related
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to
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our
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interests
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or
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concerns
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. Take Body Shop as an example, their campaign to be more aware and mindful
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of
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environment
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the environment
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make
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creates
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a
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dramatic sympathy from their customer.
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of losing the attention
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customers, they build
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loyal customers.
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, the customers can be their influencer to the others for choosing the company’s products.
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,
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cycle of consuming by advertising
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keeps
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going annually. In conclusion, despite
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an
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exposure
of
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to
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advertisement
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advertisements
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,
people
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still have a significant impact
to buy
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on buying
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some products by
the
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apply
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advertisement
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advertisements
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that personally match their interests, needs and concerns.
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introduction conclusion present
Ensure your introduction clearly outlines both sides of the argument and indicates your stance more explicitly to set the stage for the essay.
relevant specific examples
Use more specific and relevant examples to increase the depth of your support for each main point. For instance, mention specific advertising campaigns that have been notably successful or ignored.
logical structure
Maintain a clear and consistent structure throughout the essay. Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea and links logically to the next.
complete response
You have addressed both viewpoints and expressed your opinion, which is essential for this task.
clear comprehensive ideas
You have some clear ideas and support for your arguments, particularly in discussing how advertising can capture attention through algorithms and creative campaigns.
supported main points
Your discussion about how The Body Shop uses environmental concerns to build customer loyalty is a strong point and provides a specific example of successful advertising.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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