Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
There is a conflicting perspective between advertising
led to
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leading
people
to buy some goods and the other believe
that the exposure of the advertising Wrong verb form
believing
made
them disregard the information. I side with the Wrong verb form
makes
people
who think that promotion tend
to drive Change the verb form
tends
people
to buy products.
Nowadays, we are surrounding
by Wrong verb form
surrounded
a
huge and Correct article usage
apply
a massive information
both offline and online, Remove the article
massive information
a piece of massive information
advertisement
is one of them. Correct word choice
and advertisement
This
information that happened regularly stimulated people
to be overwhelmed, thereby they ignore
the Wrong verb form
ignored
advertisement
. For instance
, when we access articles by
online media, we normally Change preposition
from
expose
Wrong verb form
exposed
by
Change preposition
to
endorsement
, pop-up ads and so on, Fix the agreement mistake
endorsements
that
unconsciously we Correct pronoun usage
apply
likely
to skip them or close them. Add a missing verb
are likely
However
, algorithm
that Add an article
an algorithm
the algorithm
read
our personal Correct subject-verb agreement
reads
interest
can take our consciousness to read one of a ton of Fix the agreement mistake
interests
advertisement
and Fix the agreement mistake
advertisements
consequently
consume their product.
The competition between other goods to serve our needs made the company to
give their creativity to gain customers’ attention to Change the verb form
apply
opt
Change the verb form
opting
their
product. Change preposition
for their
Advertisement
not Fix the agreement mistake
Advertisements
just
become massive, but the campaign Rephrase
only
also
related Add a missing verb
is also
with
our Change preposition
to
interest
or Fix the agreement mistake
interests
concern
. Take Body Shop as an example, their campaign to be more aware and mindful Fix the agreement mistake
concerns
about
Change preposition
of
environment
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the environment
make
Verb problem
creates
a
dramatic sympathy from their customer. Correct article usage
apply
Instead
of losing the attention from
customers, they build Change preposition
of
the
loyal customers. Correct article usage
apply
Moreover
, the customers can be their influencer to the others for choosing the company’s products. Thus
, a
cycle of consuming by advertising Correct article usage
the
keep
going annually.
In conclusion, despite Correct subject-verb agreement
keeps
of
Change preposition
apply
an
exposure Remove the article
apply
of
Change preposition
to
advertisement
, Fix the agreement mistake
advertisements
people
still have a significant impact to buy
some products by Change preposition
on buying
the
Correct article usage
apply
advertisement
that personally match their interests, needs and concerns.Fix the agreement mistake
advertisements
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