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The line chart below shows the results of a survey giving the reasons why people moved to the capital city of a particular country.

The line chart below shows the results of a survey giving the reasons why people moved to the capital city of a particular country.
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The line chart below gives data about reasons for moving to the capital cities or specific regions.
It is clear that
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 employment and education are the most popular motives for
people
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 to change their location, since figures of these options were always higher than others and in 2015
numbers
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 came to the same level, at around 87.000
people
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.
Nevertheless
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, education was two times less than the work option in 2000, but it became as important as employment by 2015.
Moreover
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, schooling saw a little decrease between 2005 and 2010, but
after
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this
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 period these
numbers
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 increased rapidly. One can notice that relations and entertainment are the least chosen reason for moving. The
numbers
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 were the same at the beginning of the period, around 11.000 of
people
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 in 2000.
While
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 figures of adventures remained stable over the whole period,
numbers
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 of
people
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 coming to new places owing to family, saw a moderate growth between 2000 and 2010.
Although
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, by 2015
this
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 amount of
people
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 decreased slightly,
at the end
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 option friends was approximately 10 more than adventures
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, numbers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • relocation
  • migration
  • employment opportunities
  • educational facilities
  • vibrant lifestyle
  • healthcare access
  • medical services
  • social connections
  • infrastructure
  • transport facilities
  • data trends
  • survey results
  • capital city
  • allure
  • motivating factor
  • influencing
  • attracting
  • analysis
  • evaluation
  • assessment
  • consideration
  • exploration
  • introduction
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