The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The illustrations detail how West Park Secondary School evolved throughout the years, after being built in 1950. Looking from an

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perspective, it is clearly apparent that the school expanded, taking up more and more space in the surroundings. Going more into detail, as it can be seen, in 1980 the housing site was converted into a car park and a science block,

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making the original building the main one.

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, in the same year, the farmland next to the playground was turned into a sports field.

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, the school underwent other major changes after 1980. In fact, as the diagram from 2010 highlights, the playground area was reduced in other to make room for the sports field, whose previous location was used to extend the parking lot.

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, as far as the buildings where pupils attended classes are concerned, there was not any additional improvement.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 9.0

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Task Achievement: 4.0

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3 paragraphs

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renovation
expansion
modernization
infrastructure
landscape
facade
demolition
construction
alteration
amenities
accessibility
sustainability
curriculum
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pedagogy
architecture
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The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Some people believe that industries should moved from urban to rural areas. To you think the advantages will outweigh the disadvantages?

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Art is considered an essential part of all cultures throughout the world. However, these days fewer and fewer people appreciate art and turn their focus to science, technology and business. Why do you think that is? What could be done to encourage more people to take an interest in the arts?

In the future, all cars, buses, and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantagse?