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The map below is of the town of Galrsdon. A new supermarket is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below is of the town of Galrsdon. A new supermarket is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The map illustrates the town of Galrsdon and
proposed
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the proposed
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 expansion of two possible sites for
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the supermarket
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supermarket
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supermarkets
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.
Overall
, it is evident that
site
 2 will be in
city
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the city
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center
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centre
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while
site
 1 will be
out side
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outside
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 of the
city
. Significantly , the railway path and main roads are available for both proposed places.
The
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Site
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site
 1 , which is located in the north-western corner of the
city
 ,
it
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apply
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is 12000 Km
to
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from
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 Hindon population of 10000.
Site
 1 is occupied
into
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in
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 the countryside and near to the industry, people who
worked
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work
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 in the industries get
chance
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a chance
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 to use
teh
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the
super market
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supermarket
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. In terms of
site
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size
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 2, which is located
center
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centre
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 of the town where
,
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apply
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population
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the population
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 rate is high recorded as 65000.
That is
 far from 16km from
brandson
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brands on
brands
Brandon
 and 25km from
cransdon
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Cransdon
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,
population
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the population
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 is 15000 and 29000 respectively. Surprisingly ,
site
 2 will be placed
into
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in
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 the housing area.
Although
,
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apply
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site
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the site
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is lay
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is laid
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 into the housing area, traffic congestion is much lower in that place. Houses are constructed in
North
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the North
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 and South
part
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parts
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 of the
city
.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words site, city with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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