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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph demonstrates data
of
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percentage
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the percentage
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 of people who
living
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live
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 in cities
for
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in
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 four Asian countries namely
Philippines
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the Philippines
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, Malaysia, Thailand, and Indonesia from
period
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the period
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 of time between 1970 to 2020 with
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a forecast
the forecast
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forecast
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forecasts
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 of 2030 and 2040.
Overall
, throughout 70 years, all four countries experienced substantial growth of
percentage
 the
population
 that lives in the towns. In 1970,
Philippines
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the Philippines
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has
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had
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 the
most
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highest
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percentage
 of the
population
 with more than 30 per cent of residents
that dweller
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dwelling
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 in the city.
This
 remained
same
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the same
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 in 1980 and
rise
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rose
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 sharply to approximately 50 proportion in 1990. For
following
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the following
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 next 50
year
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years
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 with predictions,
this
percent
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percentage
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 fluctuated.
Additionally
, Malaysia outraced
Philippines
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the Philippines
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 after 1990. According, the number of
this
 country will skyrocket in 2040 with 80
percentage
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per cent
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 respectively.
Finally
,
near
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 18 per cent of Thailand's
population
 lived in town in 1970. It
rised
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raised
rose
rises
 gradually after 20 years with
quarter
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a quarter
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 number. From 1990 to 2020
this
 reached a plateau and
than
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then
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 projected to rise
with
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to
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 35 proportion In 2030 and 45 in 2040 which is the
fewest
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lowest
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percentage
overall
. Only close to 12
percentage
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per cent
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 of the
population
 of Indonesia
sattle
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settle
cattle
 in the cities in 1970. In 2010 it's proportion equivalent to
Philippines
. Notably,
this
 increased considerably throughout 70 years
that
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apply
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makes
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making
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the
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it the
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 second
larger
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largest
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 Asian nation among
four
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the four
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 countries
that
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where
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 most people live in the town.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, philippines, population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 3 times.
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