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The pie chart below shows the frequency of U.S. Adults’ online purchasing habits in 2015, while the bar chart shows a further classification denoting online purchasing preferences. Summarise the data by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart below shows the frequency of U.S. Adults’ online purchasing habits in 2015, while the bar chart shows a further classification denoting online purchasing preferences. Summarise the data by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the
age
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 and
crime
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 relationship,
while
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 the pie
chart
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 describes the types of
crime
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 in the UK,
last
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 year.
Overall
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, it is clear from the line graph that the highest
crime
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rate
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 is between the ages of 16 and 24. The data on the pie
chart
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 reveals that the most popular
crime
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 is violent
crime
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,
while
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 public order
crime
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 is the least popular
crime
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 in the UK. The peak of the
crime
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rate
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 took place between the ages of 12 and 16. The highest number is 80 tens of thousands at the
age
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 of 20. After the
age
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 of 20, the
crime
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rate
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 decreased sharply until 28. After the
age
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 of 28, the
crime
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rate
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 started to fall off slightly. The biggest portion on the pie
chart
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 is violent
crime
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 with 46 per
cent
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, followed by property
crime
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with
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at
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 23 per
cent
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 and drug
crime
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with
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at
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 22 per
cent
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. The public order
crime
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 took the smallest place on the
chart
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, with 9 per
cent
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, crime, chart, rate, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie chart
  • bar chart
  • online purchasing habits
  • frequency
  • classification
  • summarise
  • main features
  • comparisons
  • demographics
  • consumer trends
  • e-commerce
  • data interpretation
  • purchasing categories
  • fiscal analysis
  • technological influence
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