The bar chart below shows the number of employed persons by job type and sex for Australia last year
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given
bar chart presents Verb problem
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the
information about Australian employees Correct article usage
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last
year, breaking down with
two different aspects; sex and job type, indicated as percentages.
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Overall
, it can be clearly observed that majority
of workers were primarily men, Correct article usage
the majority
whereas
that
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of
some Change preposition
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works
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workers
such
as professionals and clerical one
were replaced by women. Correct pronoun usage
ones
However
, it is interesting to note that Australian peoples
predominantly worked as Fix the agreement mistake
people
a
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clerk
in the previous year.
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clerks
To begin
with, a closer look from
the chart Change preposition
at
shown
that men accounted for Wrong verb form
shows
work force
above 50% on average except Correct your spelling
workforce
in
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laborers
at 40%. Meanwhile, the figures Change the spelling
labourers
of
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for
females counterpart
were generally lower than 50%, excluding those who worked in professional and clerical at 70% and 98%,respectively. Fix the agreement mistake
female counterparts
Additionally
, only female clerks and professional staffs
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staff
that
outnumbered Correct pronoun usage
apply
males
figures and possessed the fewest gap between Change the noun form
male
two
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the two
gender
.
In regards to types of work, clerical jobs Change to a plural noun
genders
was
the highest number among all other jobs. It is noticeable that the white collar groups seem to be preferred by Australian Change the verb form
were
peoples
over that Fix the agreement mistake
people
of
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laborers
with a number of greater than 800,000 Change the spelling
labourers
peoples
in total Fix the agreement mistake
people
while
laborers
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labourers
was
roughly about 700,000 persons.Change the verb form
were
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