The two pie charts below show the marital status of the populations of Canada and Australia.

The two pie charts below show the marital status of the populations of Canada and Australia.
The two pie charts represent the marital status of the populations in two different nations: Canada and Australia, indicated as percentages.
Overall
, it is clearly observed that the majority of Canadians are separated but not divorced,
whereas
that of Australians are married.
However
, it is interesting to note that
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marriage is legal in Canada.
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with, in Canada,
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53% of its
populations
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is the largest
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among all other groups, followed by those who married at slightly above a quarter, at 29%.
However
, the remaining percentages from
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can be
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single, widowed, and divorced, the former two groups accounted for the same figures at 7%,
while
the latter is only 1%. Surprisingly, the number of homosexual
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is 2% greater than those who divorced.
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the contrary, a closer look at the pie chart shows alternative figures of the marital status in Australia. It may
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that Australians who are married outnumber those who
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separated with 5% larger, at 46% and 41%, respectively. Meanwhile, the number of
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are
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tripled that of divorced at 2%,
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and single
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Australians are only 5%.
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