The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features annd make comparisons where relevant.

The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features annd make comparisons where relevant.
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In the picture are shown the climate conditions differences in three big cities including: New York (in purple), Sydney (in red) and London (in yellow).  Below the graph, there is
also
a table with the annual hours of sunlight. 
First,
we can surely see that the hottest is New York, thanks to its 2535 hours of sunshine per year it is able to reach an insane peak of almost 30
degrees
in the middle of July. At the same time, it is the coldest one among all of them during January and December with 5
degrees
. The same pattern is shared by London, being
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warmer in July/August with a spike of 23
degrees
, which lasted a month.
In addition
, like New York, the lowest point is
also
in January and December, but it never
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those off peaks even if the sun in the sky is the lowest between all of them. In conclusion, going against the grain there is Sydney.
This
city being in the southern hemisphere has a totally different trend.
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the hours of sunshine, which are comparable to the
big apple
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,
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July is registered
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coldest temperature in the entire year with a little bit more than 15
degrees
.
While
in
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january
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January
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and
december
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December
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the
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hottest months, with 25
degrees
.
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