The diagram below shows the Life Sycle of a frog.

The diagram below shows the Life Sycle of a frog.
The diagram shows the natural process life cycle of a frog from the embryo
stage
, through seven developmental phases from tadpole to fully grown amphibian.  
Initially
, the fertilised eggs grow into embryos, from which tiny tadpoles emerge and shelter under plants in the water or pond. The tadpole begins life black in colour, and it has a long
tail
and shorter body. As it grows, external gills for breathing are produced 
while
subsequent stages in its development include a longer
tail
and when
this
stage
is complete, back limbs begin to appear which allows the tiny creature to swim faster. The baby frog is nourished by food and nutrients stored in its
tail
, and the next
stage
in the cycle is for the front limbs
to begin
growing
while
the
tail
shrinks and eventually disappears. At each
stage
, the creature continues to enlarge significantly and changes in colour from black
,
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to dark green and ultimately to bright green. Once the
tail
has disappeared, the frog is supported on four limbs and continues, in the final phase, to develop into a full-sized amphibian.
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