Some children spend hours every day on smartphones. Why is this the case ? Do you think this is positive or negative development?

Everybody knows

majority

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the majority

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of

children

use smartphones. And

this

situation is increasing year by year. It seems to me that, as technologies develop

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their importance in our lives is increasing.

This

also

affects the lives of

children

. In my view, today

children

can find easier for themselves any information

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children

of

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the past

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. It develops

children

's ability to better understand both their desires and realizes.

Consequently

,

this

is

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attack for

children

and their parents. Even though

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children

spend most of their time on

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smartphones, they are isolated from the real world.

As a result

,

children

face various difficulties in establishing empathy. In consequence,

children

be become

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introverted.

This

can lead to some negative results in them.

For example

, they may have difficulty making friends with others.

For

this

reason, there are more negative aspects than

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positive aspects of

children

spending a lot of time on phones. I think that spending a lot of time on the smartphone is harmful

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children

.