The provided line chart depicts the rate of citizens living in urban spaces of four countries in Asia over the course of 70 years, beginning from 1970
The graph illustrates the
population
's rate of people who live in cities in four different Asian countries (Philipines, Malaysia, Thailand, Correct word choice
and Indonesi
Indonesi
) between 1970 to 2020, and the forecast Correct your spelling
Indonesia
population
in 2030 and 2040.
Overall
, it is evident that all countries exhibit an increasing population
trend from the past to the future.
In 1970, Philippines's
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the Philippines's
population
proportion was just above 30% of total
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the total
population
, making it the highest contributor in that year. The figure then
significantly reached 50% of total
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the total
population
by 1990, before slightly decreased
to around 40% by 2010. Wrong verb form
decreasing
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this
until
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On the other hand
, in 1970, Malaysia had just under the
third of Correct article usage
a
total
residents. Its share continued to grow to greater than 60% by 2020 and it is expected to reach about 80% of total residents by the end of the period, making it be most dominant contributor from 2000 to 2040.
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the total
the
Thailand's figure, the populace's rate was just below 20% of Correct article usage
apply
total
world's people in 1970. It steadily climbed to nearly 30% of Correct article usage
the total
total
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the total
population
by 2000 and it is predicted to contribute to larger
than 40% by 2040. Correct word choice
more
Conversely
, the number of
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apply
Indonesia
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Indonesian
population
was only around 10% in 1970 which was the least
proportion at that time. Correct word choice
lowest
However
, its amount showed a remakable
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remarkable
rising
to just about 50% of Wrong verb form
rise
total
world's residents by 2020. Correct article usage
the total
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Moreover
this
figure will continue to rise to around 60% by 2040.Submitted by chocolate10
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