Some think the current generation should take steps to protect the environment for the next generation.to what extend do you agree or dis agree.
In the present time, our environment has been alarmingly polluted. It is use
common
believed that people should take action to prevent the environment from being damaged for the next generation. I firmly agree with Change the adjective
commonly
this
Linking Words
statemen
because our daily activities cause environmental contamination and we should tackle the problems immediately.
Correct your spelling
statement
To begin
with, there are several Linking Words
pollution
has Use synonyms
been
risen Unnecessary verb
apply
such
as air Linking Words
pollution
Use synonyms
due to
huge Linking Words
amount
of exhaust emissions from transport vehicles and factories. Using cars, Fix the agreement mistake
amounts
planes
Correct word choice
and planes
release
a large amount of carbon dioxide Correct subject-verb agreement
releases
in
the Change preposition
into
asmotphere
, which is one of the main reasons leading to climate change. Correct your spelling
atmosphere
In addition
, water Linking Words
source
Fix the agreement mistake
sources
has
been polluted Correct subject-verb agreement
have
due to
Linking Words
throwing
Correct article usage
the throwing
waste
, and draining Change preposition
of waste
water
containing chemicals from farming forward to lakes and rivers. These contaminations Change preposition
of water
do
not only Verb problem
affect
affect
our present livesVerb problem
apply
,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
for Linking Words
futures
.
In order to protect our Fix the agreement mistake
future
inviroment
, people should address the issues before they become worse. Reducing the use of energy Correct your spelling
environment
sourece
will offset air Correct your spelling
source
sources
pollution
Use synonyms
as well as
save natural sources for the young generation. Another solution to resolve the problem is to plant more trees in cities since leaves Linking Words
absort
carbon dioxide and release O2, helping reduce the amount Correct your spelling
absorb
polluted
air. Change preposition
of polluted
Furthermore
, Linking Words
encouraging
consumersWrong verb form
encourages
Fix the infinitive
to
less
plastic bags and more cyclable materials.
In conclusion, it is necessary to protect our environment because environmental Correct quantifier usage
fewer
pollution
does not have a negative impact on our lives, it Use synonyms
also
affects the next generation's lives. Everyone should have a hand in Linking Words
issue
.Correct article usage
the issue
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task achievement
Your essay addresses the question, but you need to ensure that all points made are fully relevant and specific. For instance, you mention pollution sources but could elaborate more on specific steps individuals can take.
task achievement
Include more varied examples that directly support your statements. Specific examples will make your arguments stronger and your writing more convincing.
coherence cohesion
Mention solutions like 'using less plastic and more recyclable materials' should be clearly connected to the points about pollution. Ensure each idea flows logically from one to the next.
coherence cohesion
Improve the introduction by better outlining the main points you'll discuss. Also, the conclusion should summarize your main points more clearly.
task achievement
You have a clear thesis statement that addresses the prompt directly.
coherence cohesion
Your conclusion reiterates the importance of environmental protection well.
Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.