The graph below shows the demand for electricity in England during typical days in winter and summer. The pie chart shows how electricity is used in an average English house.

The supplied line graph indicates how much

electricity

is consumed by English

people

in winter and summer.

Moreover

,the provided pie chart illustrates the

electricity

is being used for what types of

purpose

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in

England

. It can be clearly seen that the demand

of

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for

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electricity

has an upward trend in winter in

England

.

However

,the

amount

of using

electricity

in summer by English

people

remained unchanged.

In addition

,the highest percentage of using

electricity

is for heating rooms and water.Whilst,

people

do not use

electricity

for lighting and TV very much in

England

. Approximately

34000

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watt

electricity

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of electricity

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in

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is

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being used by English

people

and

then

after a moderate rise,it reached the

peack

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peak

at

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of

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nearly 50000

watt

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in 21 in

England

in winter.(Which is the highest

amount

of using

electricity

over the period).

Additionally

,more than

a

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half

usage

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the usage

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of

electricity

is for heating rooms and water at %52.5 in the UK.(Which is the highest percentage of consuming

electricity

over the whole year). In summer,the

amount

of

using

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electricity

initiates

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at just under 20000

watt

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at 0 and

then

it levelled off at roughly 15000

watt

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at 6 in

England

.Next,

at the end

of the

trend

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trend,

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the usage of

electricity

reached around

of

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18000 at 24 in the UK.Surprisingly,the

amount

of consuming

electricity

for lighting,TV,

radio

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was completely the same as the percentage of using

vaccum

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vacuum

cleaner,food mixers and electric tools at %15 in

England

.