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The idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashioned one. The new fashion mil be to have several careers or ways of earning money and further education will be something that continues throughout life.

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In the new era,
people
 easily have the opportunity to access higher education;
for instance
, the new fashion is to have more than
two
careers
 as a chance to earn more money than having just one or even nothing. That phenomenon has to be evaluated depending on the country to be analyzed. To illustrate it, it is not the same,
study
 many
careers
 in
Colombia
 and one in Europe. In
this
 essay, I will explain the pros and cons of having many
careers
 and compare the impact in these
two
 countries. Primarily, having several ways to earn good salaries is a good approach to promoting
the
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growth in the personal economy and impulsing
people
 to take courses in
further
 education; even though,
study
-related courses of
study
, are a plus if you are working as a freelancer or in the STEM area. As an illustration, studying statistics and computer science has more value in the labour market both in
Colombia
 and in Europe,
due to
this
to
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careers
 develop similar abilities that can be used in different areas.
Moreover
,
people
 with similar characteristics have more opportunities to get
two
 jobs, even more so, with the trend of these jobs being remote.
Nevertheless
, it isn't the same, has more than one career in
Colombia
 than in Europe,
that
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 is because education in
this
 country isn't free, in comparison with almost every country in that continent.
Likewise
, the minimum salary is lower in
Colombia
,
additionally
, the working day is longer.
For
this
 reason, sometimes it is hard to take
two
 jobs, or
study
two
 courses, taking into account, the
last
 points I mentioned. To give another example,
people
 in
Colombia
, opt
for
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study
 to make money, leaving aside their dreams. it is important to stand out because of the quality of life
people
 here are facing. All things considered before, the new fashion is just for
people
 with specific conditions, poor
people
, or who lack opportunities, occasionally they can get another job to earn more money.
To conclude
,
people
 are adopting
this
 new way in the labour world
as a result
 of changes in working.
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You have clearly set out the argument and structure for your essay, which makes it easy to follow.
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Your use of specific examples, such as the comparison between Colombia and Europe, adds depth to your discussion.
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Your essay demonstrates a good understanding of the diverse factors affecting education and careers in different regions.

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