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The chart illustrates distances traveled per person per week (in kilometers) in terms of 5 types of transport in the UK between 1990 and 2000.

The chart illustrates distances traveled per person per week (in kilometers) in terms of 5 types of transport in the UK between 1990 and 2000.
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The bar chart illustrates in
UK
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the UK
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 how long
traveled
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travelled
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 per person in every week in five different
mode
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modes
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 of transport namely bicycle,motorbike,air,bus and rail during the period between 1990 and 2000.
Overall
, it is clearly evident that
distance
 of slightly increased over the decade. Bus and train were the popular way of transport in the given period,
whereas
other
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the other
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 three
mode
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modes
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transport
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of transport
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 contributed
for
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to
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 minor
distance
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distances
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. In 1990, most people commuted via the bus about 40km
distance
, that amount was claimed
slighlty
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slightly
 just above 40
km
 in the next following decade. Rain travellers
also
 show the same manner , in 1990 and 2000 there was
the
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a
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 small amount of change that
occured
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occurred
occurs
.
Other mode
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Another mode
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 of
transportations
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transportation
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, which
used
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are used
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 for smaller
distance
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distances
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 of travel accounted
less
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for less
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 than 2km over the two
decade
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decades
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. In total the highest travel
distance
 was registered in 2000,
amounted
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amounting
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for
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to
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 approximately 110km,
while
 in 1990,
which
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it
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 made up 100km.
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