The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
The line graph below illustrates information on the amounts of
participants
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as film club, martial arts, amateur dramatics, Linking Words
table
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tennis
, and musical performances at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia in a period range 2000 and 2020. I
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Overall
, all figures increased except amateur dramatics. The most noticeable performance was done by Linking Words
participants
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tennis
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Film club decreased and increased until 2010 with the Use synonyms
number
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participants
just above 65 and 70, respectively. Use synonyms
Furthermore
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index was a leader every year. Linking Words
Table
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tennis
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number
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participants
, approximately 18. Use synonyms
However
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this
figure rose dramatically and had 50 Linking Words
participants
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at the end
and was the second leader
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a lot of people lost interest in amateur dramatics and had around 9 members in 2020. Musical interest appeared in 2005 and had approximately the same Remove the comma
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number
of members who played Use synonyms
table
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tennis
in 2000. Use synonyms
Finally
, the Linking Words
last
activity martial arts fluctuated between 30 and 37 members, Linking Words
However
, the Linking Words
number
of Use synonyms
participants
in Use synonyms
this
activity was the same in 2000 and 2020.Linking Words
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