Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some say that governments must
to
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give more money for building railways rather
that
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than
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roads
.
This
essay totally disagrees with that statement, because
roads
are
main
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the main
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transportation of
people
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for people
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and products like food and clothes
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are exports
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exports
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mostly on the
roads
. In terms of transportation,
it is clear that
roads
are more
avaible
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available
for folk to go
their
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destination and sometimes might be even
chiper
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cheaper
than railroads. In railways,
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the crowd
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crowd
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crowds
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do not can
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bring with them so
much
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things, when if they want to populate another home
at
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the
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another part of the country.
For example
, in China was
the
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poll about
this
question and approximately 80% of
people
choosed
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chose
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that
roads
are more important for them,
with
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that
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reason that I mentioned.
Roads
can be
also
crucial for export needs like
foods
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food
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, clothes, and materials. These stuffs very
neccesery
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necessary
for all
the
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humanity and without
them
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them,
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they can not live just 3 days.
For instance
, 5 years ago, when it was time
COVID-19
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of COVID-19
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, I know that in my town there
were
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was
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no
foods
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food
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in supermarkets, and it is
due to
all cars and tracks that transported
foods
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food
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do
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not
can
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go anywhere, because
government
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the government
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closed all
roads
for them. In conclusion, some might believe that spending more money
for
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on
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railways will be good rather
that
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than
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give
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giving
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it to make more qualitative
roads
, but I do not think so, because
people
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people's
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transportation and their properties are more
transpored
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transported
transposed
on the
roads
and products that require
people
are
also
export them with cars and tracks.
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coherence cohesion
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task achievement
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coherence cohesion
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Examples provided, such as those relating to China and COVID-19, are relevant and help support the main points made in the essay.

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