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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some say that governments must
to
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give more money for building railways rather
that
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than
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roads
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.
This
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 essay totally disagrees with that statement, because
roads
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 are
main
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the main
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 transportation of
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people
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for people
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 and products like food and clothes
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are exports
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exports
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 mostly on the
roads
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. In terms of transportation,
it is clear that
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roads
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 are more
avaible
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available
 for folk to go
their
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 destination and sometimes might be even
chiper
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cheaper
 than railroads. In railways,
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the crowd
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crowd
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crowds
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do not can
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 bring with them so
much
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 things, when if they want to populate another home
at
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in
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the
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another part of the country.
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, in China was
the
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 poll about
this
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 question and approximately 80% of
people
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choosed
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chose
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 that
roads
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 are more important for them,
with
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for
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that
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the
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 reason that I mentioned.
Roads
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 can be
also
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 crucial for export needs like
foods
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food
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, clothes, and materials. These stuffs very
neccesery
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necessary
 for all
the
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apply
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humanity and without
them
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them,
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 they can not live just 3 days.
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, 5 years ago, when it was time
COVID-19
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of COVID-19
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, I know that in my town there
were
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was
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 no
foods
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food
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 in supermarkets, and it is
due to
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 all cars and tracks that transported
foods
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food
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do
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could
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 not
can
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go anywhere, because
government
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the government
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 closed all
roads
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 for them. In conclusion, some might believe that spending more money
for
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on
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 railways will be good rather
that
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than
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give
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giving
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 it to make more qualitative
roads
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, but I do not think so, because
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people
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people's
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 transportation and their properties are more
transpored
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transported
transposed
 on the
roads
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 and products that require
people
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 are
also
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 export them with cars and tracks.

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coherence cohesion
The essay needs better organization and flow between the paragraphs. Consider creating a clearer outline to make sure your ideas are logically structured and connected.
coherence cohesion
While the essay does have an introduction and a conclusion, the conclusion could be more robust. Reflect on your main points and provide a stronger summation.
task achievement
Your main points are supported, but there are grammatical errors that make the ideas less clear. Make sure to proofread your work and consider using more complex sentence structures to improve clarity.
task achievement
The essay addresses the topic fully, and the writer provides a clear stance on the issue and backs it up with arguments.
coherence cohesion
Introduction and conclusion are present, giving the essay a sense of completeness.
task achievement
Examples provided, such as those relating to China and COVID-19, are relevant and help support the main points made in the essay.

Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Carbon emissions
  • Mass transportation
  • Traffic congestion
  • Economic growth
  • Regional development
  • Initial investment
  • Feasibility
  • Flexibility
  • Rural areas
  • Integration
  • Sustainable
  • Efficiency
  • Infrastructure
  • Commuters
  • Public expenditure
  • Autonomous vehicles
  • Long-term investment
  • Accessibility
  • Connectivity
  • Modal shift
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