Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some say that governments must
to
give more money for building railways rather Change the verb form
apply
that
Correct word choice
than
roads
. This
essay totally disagrees with that statement, because roads
are main
transportation of Correct article usage
the main
people
and products like food and clothes Change preposition
for people
Add a missing verb
are exports
exports
mostly on the Replace the word
exported
roads
.
In terms of transportation, it is clear that
roads
are more avaible
for folk to go Correct your spelling
available
their
destination and sometimes might be even Change preposition
to their
chiper
than railroads. In railways, Correct your spelling
cheaper
Correct article usage
the crowd
crowd
Fix the agreement mistake
crowds
do not can
bring with them so Remove the verb
cannot
much
things, when if they want to populate another home Change the quantifier
many
at
Change preposition
in
the
another part of the country. Remove the article
apply
For example
, in China was the
poll about Correct article usage
a
this
question and approximately 80% of people
choosed
that Correct your spelling
chose
roads
are more important for them, with
Change preposition
for
that
reason that I mentioned.
Correct determiner usage
the
Roads
can be also
crucial for export needs like foods
, clothes, and materials. These stuffs very Fix the agreement mistake
food
neccesery
for all Correct your spelling
necessary
the
humanity and without Correct article usage
apply
them
they can not live just 3 days. Add a comma
them,
For instance
, 5 years ago, when it was time COVID-19
, I know that in my town there Change preposition
of COVID-19
were
no Correct subject-verb agreement
was
foods
in supermarkets, and it is Fix the agreement mistake
food
due to
all cars and tracks that transported foods
Fix the agreement mistake
food
do
not Verb problem
could
can
go anywhere, because Verb problem
apply
government
closed all Correct article usage
the government
roads
for them.
In conclusion, some might believe that spending more money for
railways will be good rather Change preposition
on
that
Correct word choice
than
give
it to make more qualitative Wrong verb form
giving
roads
, but I do not think so, because people
transportation and their properties are more Change noun form
people's
transpored
on the Correct your spelling
transported
transposed
roads
and products that require people
are also
export them with cars and tracks.Submitted by Kawasaki on
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coherence cohesion
The essay needs better organization and flow between the paragraphs. Consider creating a clearer outline to make sure your ideas are logically structured and connected.
coherence cohesion
While the essay does have an introduction and a conclusion, the conclusion could be more robust. Reflect on your main points and provide a stronger summation.
task achievement
Your main points are supported, but there are grammatical errors that make the ideas less clear. Make sure to proofread your work and consider using more complex sentence structures to improve clarity.
task achievement
The essay addresses the topic fully, and the writer provides a clear stance on the issue and backs it up with arguments.
coherence cohesion
Introduction and conclusion are present, giving the essay a sense of completeness.
task achievement
Examples provided, such as those relating to China and COVID-19, are relevant and help support the main points made in the essay.
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