The graph below shows the number of public transit passengers from 1989 to 2009 and bus and tram passenger numbers between 2000 and 2008 in Melbourne. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the number of public transit passengers from 1989 to 2009 and bus and tram passenger numbers between 2000 and 2008 in Melbourne.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The line graph illustrates the
number
of public transportation use between 1989 and 2009 alongside those of
bus
and
tram
users from 2000 to 2008 over a period of 8 years in the city. It can be clearly seen that the
number
of total public transit users consistently increased
while
there was
also
an upward trend for
bus
and
tram
passengers
.
In addition
,
at the end
of the timescale, the
bus
was used more in common compared to the
tram
users. Turning to the graph in more detail,
290million
Correct your spelling
290 million
of Melbourne’s citizens used public transportation in 1989 and the
number
of
passengers
steadily increased except for the period between 1989 to 1994. In the meantime, the
figures
for
passengers
reached a peak of 500million in 2009. Looking at the second line graph, the
number
of
tram
passengers
was higher than the
number
of
bus
passengers
until 2005, when both
figures
were equal at 150million each. After that time, the
number
of
bus
passengers
continued to rise
while
the
figures
for
tram
Fix the agreement mistake
trams
show examples
soared in 2007, ascending to roughly 220million.
Finally
, in 2008, both
figures
climbed substantially and passed 100million each.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, bus, tram, passengers, figures with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.

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