The graph shows the maount of goods transported in the UK from 1947 to 2002.

The graph shows the maount of goods transported in the UK from 1947 to 2002.
The line graph illustrates the quantity of
goods
that were transported via road,
water
, rail, and pipeline in the UK between 1947 to 2002. The quantity is depicted in millions of
tonnes
.
Overall
, the
amount
of
goods
transported via roads,
water
, and pipelines
have
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increased over the years, with roads being the most popular choice.
However
, the
amount
transferred via rails fluctuated over the years
,
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but stayed relatively constant. In 1947, 70
million
tonnes
were transported via roads. Regardless of frequent fluctuations, it climbed steadily up to about 100
million
tonnes
by 2002.
On the other hand
, pipelines were used to transport the least
amount
of
goods
. It transported about 5
million
tonnes
in 1947, followed by a substantial increase to approximately 22
million
in 2002.
Water
and rail transported about 40
million
tonnes
in 1947,
however
,
water
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the water
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gained more popularity
to transport
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heavier
goods
in comparison to trains. In 2002, nearly 65
million
tonnes
were sent via
water
;
conversely
, for trains, the statistics plummeted to about 30
million
in 1994, upon which it rose back to 40
million
tonnes
in 2002. In conclusion,
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the largest
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amount
of material was transported via land throughout the time frame, followed by
water
, and rails. The least quantity was transported via pipelines.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words goods, water, tonnes, amount, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.

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