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The graph shows the maount of goods transported in the UK from 1947 to 2002.

The graph shows the maount of goods transported in the UK from 1947 to 2002.
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The line graph illustrates the quantity of
goods
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 that were transported via road,
water
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, rail, and pipeline in the UK between 1947 to 2002. The quantity is depicted in millions of
tonnes
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.
Overall
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, the
amount
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 of
goods
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 transported via roads,
water
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, and pipelines
have
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 increased over the years, with roads being the most popular choice.
However
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, the
amount
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 transferred via rails fluctuated over the years
,
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 but stayed relatively constant. In 1947, 70
million
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tonnes
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 were transported via roads. Regardless of frequent fluctuations, it climbed steadily up to about 100
million
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tonnes
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 by 2002.
On the other hand
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, pipelines were used to transport the least
amount
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 of
goods
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. It transported about 5
million
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tonnes
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 in 1947, followed by a substantial increase to approximately 22
million
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 in 2002.
Water
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 and rail transported about 40
million
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tonnes
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 in 1947,
however
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,
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water
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the water
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 gained more popularity
to transport
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in transporting
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 heavier
goods
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 in comparison to trains. In 2002, nearly 65
million
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tonnes
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 were sent via
water
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;
conversely
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, for trains, the statistics plummeted to about 30
million
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 in 1994, upon which it rose back to 40
million
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tonnes
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 in 2002. In conclusion,
largest
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the largest
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amount
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 of material was transported via land throughout the time frame, followed by
water
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, and rails. The least quantity was transported via pipelines.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words goods, water, tonnes, amount, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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