The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton and planned future development on the site

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton and planned future development on the site
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The given maps illustrate the current and future plans of the Norbition industrial
area
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Overall
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,it is obvious
by contrast
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that most of today's factories will be replaced with housing in the future and will be constructed new facilities. As the maps show,it is visible that today's 7 factories will be changed to housing and a school will be constructed in the east
area
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of industry and above it a playground is expected to be built.
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,in the
centre
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of the
area
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2 facilities,namely shops and a medical
centre
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will be established which are located in the south of the map.
According to
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the future plan,it is predicted that a new road in the northwest of the
centre
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will be crossed by new housing.Afterwards,
hey
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they
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are gonna build another roundabout a bit smaller than the old one on the southern side of the town.
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,there will be built one massive bridge in the middle of the river with access to the city
centre
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,there will be one block of housing after crossing the bridge in the north of the industrial
area
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "by contrast".
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words area, centre with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • development
  • infrastructure
  • manufacturing
  • facilities
  • transition
  • planning
  • commercial
  • residential
  • renovation
  • urban planning
  • sustainability
  • environmental impact
  • local economy
  • rejuvenation
  • construction
  • modernization
  • accessibility
  • demolition
  • gentrification
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