The bat chart below gives information about how familes in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarize the information and make comparison.

The bat chart below gives information about how familes in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

Summarize the information and make comparison.
The bar charts show the percentages of weekly income which was spent by households in specific categories in 1968
comparing
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compared
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with 2018.
Overall
, it can be seen that
food
contributed to the largest share
in
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of
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weekly spending in 1968,
while
Leisure
hold
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held
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the greatest percentage in 2018. In 1968, most families allocated their income to
food
with 35%, contributing to the highest share. Followed by housing and clothing, which had the same level at 10%.
While
Fuel and power
was
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were
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the least popular for spending with just above 5 %, the other remains showed the same percentage at approximately 7.5%.
However
, in 2018, leisure had a significant growth to roughly 23%,
while
food
experienced a substantial drop, lowering its spending compared to
food
. Housing and transports,
also
rise to nearly 20% and 14%, respectively.
In contrast
, a negative decline occurred in fuel and power, clothing and personal goods, accounting for 4%, 5% and 4% respectively. Meanwhile, household goods remained steady at 7.5%. In summary,
Although
,
food
experienced a sharp drop, a considerable incline
saw
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was seen
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in leisure, housing and
transports
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transport
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. Household goods remained constant at the same level in both years.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remains" was used 3 times.

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