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Topic: The graph bellow gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

Topic: The graph bellow gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
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The charts
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 the ratio of the people, who lived in towns, in 4 different far eastern countries (Philippines, Malaysia, Thailand, and Indonesia) from 1970 to 2020.
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, it can be seen the future expectations for the next 20 years.
Overall
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, all the percentages of the population in
cities
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 in four
contries
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countries
 increased from 1970 to now.
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, these values are expected to continue rising in 2030 and 2040. At the current time, the most crowded
cities
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 are in Malaysia with almost 80% of people. The
cities
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 of Indonesia and
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Philippines have the second and the third places with just over 50% and around 45% of individuals respectively. The top three places are predicted to be in the same order in the years 2030 and 2040.
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, it is predicted that all the countries
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 have over 50% of the citizens living in the
cities
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 20 years later. In 1970,
Philippines
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the Philippines
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 had the most crowded
cities
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 over 30% of people. It rose in 2010 after fluctuating between 1970 and 2010. Indonesia has the lowest number of individuals who were living in the
cities
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 with around 15% in 1970. It had a
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 increase and reached around 30% as same as Thailand in 2000.
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