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The chart beow shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

The chart beow shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.
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The bar chart illustrates how frequently people in the USA visited junk
food
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restaurants
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 between 2003 and 2013. The data is divided into six categories: every day, several times a
week
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, once a
week
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, once or twice a month, a few times a year, and never.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that the most common
frequencies
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frequency
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 of eating at fast
food
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restaurants
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were
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was
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 once a
week
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 and once or twice a month throughout the given period.
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 the least common rates were eating every day or never. In 2003, around 4% of people ate at fast
food
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restaurants
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 every day, and
this
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 figure remained consistent in both 2006 and 2013. The proportion of those who have a dinner at junk
food
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 restaurant several times a
week
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 was approximately 17%, slightly increasing to about exactly one-fifth in 2006, before declining to around 15% in 2013. The largest category was those who ate at fast
food
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restaurants
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 once a
week
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 and once or twice a month. Weekly visits peaked in 2006 at about one-
third,
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before decreasing to around 27% by 2013,
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 monthly visits consistently dropped in 2006 to
exaclty
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exactly
 a quarter, and jumped to 33% in 2013. The proportion of people who never ate in fast
food
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restaurants
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 remained consistently low, at about 5% or less across all three years.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, restaurants, week with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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