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The bar chart shows the expectation to change of European young people in the next 20 years in 5 different areas. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the expectation to change of European young people in the next 20 years in 5 different areas. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The figure illustrates the
pridiction
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prediction
production
 of differences which may occur in European youth in five categories,
such
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 as health, air
quality
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, water
quality
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, food
quality
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, and people communication, for the next 20 years.
Overall
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, the only section
that is
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 expected to improve is communication between the young people in Europe in 20 years. Health and the
qualities
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quality
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 of water and air will
may
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get worse,
while
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the nutrients
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the quality of the nutrients
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quality
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 will be at the same level. First of all, the worst scenario is for the
quality
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 of breathing with almost 80% probability
for
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of
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 getting worse. For the next 20 years, the
clearity
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clarity
 of basic liquid and the health of the teenagers have
the
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apply
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second and third place of getting worse with 60% and just under 60% respectively.
On the other hand
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, the food sector is expected to remain at the same
quality
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 with
50
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a 50
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% ratio of improvement possibility, whilst the communication between the individuals is predicted to get better with
60
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a 60
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% chance in the next 2 decades.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words quality with synonyms.
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