The table shows the worldwide market share of the mobile phone market for manufactures in the years 2005 and 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. (20 mins.
The chart illustrates the percentage of
market
share
in mobile phone industries around the world between years
2005 and 2006. To compare the selling volumes between cellphone companies within two years record.
The Correct article usage
the years
most
high-volume in Correct quantifier usage
apply
market
share
was Nokia Company indicated approximately
32.5 Change preposition
at approximately
percent
and minimal increased to 35 Change the spelling
per cent
percent
in order. BenQ Mobile Change the spelling
per cent
was
the lowest Verb problem
had
sale volumes
in Fix the agreement mistake
sales volume
year
2005 which Change the article
the year
got
around 5 Verb problem
was
percent
and decreased Change the spelling
per cent
in
Change preposition
by
a
half amount of Correct article usage
apply
market
Correct article usage
the market
share
in year
2006. Motorola, Samsung, and Change the article
the year
others
brands Correct quantifier usage
other
were
maintained Unnecessary verb
apply
the
similar level in the Correct article usage
a
market
in rank
of 10 Change preposition
ranking
percent
to 20 Change the spelling
per cent
percent
in Change the spelling
per cent
year
2005, Change the article
the year
whereas
Motorola was
increased Unnecessary verb
apply
market
Correct pronoun usage
its market
share
more
than 20 Change preposition
by more
percent
in Change the spelling
per cent
year
2006 in comparison with Samsung and other brands Change the article
the year
were
dropped Unnecessary verb
apply
the
Correct article usage
apply
sale
volumes.
Sony Ericsson Fix the agreement mistake
sales
was
reached the Unnecessary verb
apply
market
share
at 6 percent
Change the spelling
per cent
while
LG got higher
Correct article usage
a higher
as
Change preposition
at
level
Correct article usage
a level
7
Change preposition
of 7
percent
in Change the spelling
per cent
year
2005. Change the article
the year
In contrast
, Sony Ericsson was
increased Unnecessary verb
apply
the
Change the word
its
market
share
to more than 7 percent
but LG Change the spelling
per cent
was
Unnecessary verb
apply
slowdown
in Add an article
a slowdown
the slowdown
year
2006.Change the article
the year
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Vocabulary: Replace the words market, share, percent, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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