The table shows the worldwide market share of the mobile phone market for manufactures in the years 2005 and 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. (20 mins.

The table shows the worldwide market share of the mobile phone market for manufactures in the years 2005 and 2006.  Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.   (20 mins.
The chart illustrates the percentage of
market
share
in mobile phone industries around the world between
years
Correct article usage
the years
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2005 and 2006. To compare the selling volumes between cellphone companies within two years record. The
most
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apply
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high-volume in
market
share
was Nokia Company indicated
approximately
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at approximately
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32.5
percent
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per cent
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and minimal increased to 35
percent
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per cent
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in order. BenQ Mobile
was
Verb problem
had
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the lowest
sale volumes
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sales volume
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in
year
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the year
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2005 which
got
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was
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around 5
percent
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per cent
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and decreased
in
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by
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a
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apply
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half amount of
market
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the market
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share
in
year
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the year
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2006. Motorola, Samsung, and
others
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other
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brands
were
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apply
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maintained
the
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a
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similar level in the
market
in rank
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ranking
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of 10
percent
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per cent
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to 20
percent
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per cent
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in
year
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the year
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2005,
whereas
Motorola
was
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apply
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increased
market
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its market
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share
more
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by more
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than 20
percent
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per cent
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in
year
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the year
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2006 in comparison with Samsung and other brands
were
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apply
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dropped
the
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apply
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sale
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sales
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volumes. Sony Ericsson
was
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apply
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reached the
market
share
at 6
percent
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per cent
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while
LG got
higher
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a higher
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as
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at
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level
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a level
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7
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of 7
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percent
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per cent
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in
year
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the year
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2005.
In contrast
, Sony Ericsson
was
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apply
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increased
the
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its
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market
share
to more than 7
percent
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per cent
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but LG
was
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apply
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slowdown
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a slowdown
the slowdown
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in
year
Change the article
the year
show examples
2006.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words market, share, percent, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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