Nowadays environmental problems are too big to be managed by individual persons or individual countries. In other words, it is an international problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In recent times environmental issues have increased. It is a highly debatable issue whether individuals can control
this
problem, or whether it is an international issue. I agree that everyone contributes to save
the environment.Change the verb form
saving
This
essay will outline the benefits effects
of managing environmental Correct word choice
and effects
problems
by individuals.
To begin
, people
have a vital role in controlling environmental problems
. Reducing the number of cars can significantly reduce carbon emissions which leads to maintain
the atmosphere. Change the verb form
maintaining
For example
, the result of conducted research at Glasgow University illustrates that transportations
causes 80% of air pollution. Fix the agreement mistake
transportation
Thus
, people
should decrease the number of cars and use other types like buses. Moreover
, cutting trees could leads
to big Change the verb form
lead
risk
in environmental issues. If Fix the agreement mistake
risks
people
cutting
trees , Wrong verb form
cut
this
can be reduced
carbon Wrong verb form
reduce
dioxid
and Correct your spelling
dioxide
make
Verb problem
cause
problems
. For instance
, deforestation in India make
Change the verb form
makes
people
suffer from health problems
. Therefore
, people
can save Correct article usage
the envirenment
envirenment
Correct your spelling
environment
with
growing a lot of plants.
Change preposition
by
In addition
, industry can also
influences
Change the verb form
influence
in
environmental Change preposition
apply
problems
. Many factories produce dangeour
emissions that may cause Correct your spelling
dangerous
danger
healthe
Correct your spelling
health
problems
.
A good example here is my friend who works in oil factor
Correct your spelling
factories
that
now Correct word choice
and
suffer
from heart disease. Change the verb form
suffers
Furthermore
, the wastes
Fix the agreement mistake
waste
are
not only Unnecessary verb
apply
harm
Correct subject-verb agreement
harms
people
lives but Change noun form
people's
also
are making
the view Wrong verb form
makes
of
the country is not good. Change preposition
that
This
can reduce economy
. To illustrate, visitors Correct article usage
the economy
attract
to Wrong verb form
are attracted
visit
clean places. Wrong verb form
visiting
As a result
, people
should be educated to be aware of the importance of clean
environment.
In conclusion, minimizing the Correct article usage
a clean
transportations
, avoiding deforestation ,Fix the agreement mistake
transportation
throuing
Correct your spelling
throwing
wastes
and Fix the agreement mistake
waste
indusry
are major causes that Correct your spelling
industry
individaul
can control to save our lives. Correct your spelling
individual
individuals
Therefor
, the government must support Correct your spelling
Therefore
people
to take
the right Correct your spelling
make
decission
and put Correct your spelling
decision
decisions
Correct article usage
a stricet
stricet
role to avoid Correct your spelling
strict
this
Correct determiner usage
these
proplems
.Correct your spelling
problem
problems
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task response
Ensure each main point is clearly developed and supported. For example, the essay could further elaborate on the role of industries in environmental problems with specific data or studies.
coherence cohesion
Work on the transitions between paragraphs to enhance the flow of ideas. Linking sentences between paragraphs can help the reader understand how each point relates to the main argument.
coherence cohesion
The introduction clearly states the topic and the writer’s position, which sets a clear direction for the essay.
task response
Relevant examples are provided to support the main points, which strengthens the argument.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.
Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.
When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.
Linking words for giving examples:
- for example
- for instance
- to illustrate this
- to give a clear example
- such as
- namely
- to illustrate
- take, for example
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