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To the right is a line graph which shows the number of farms and farm workers in the United States from 1910 – 2000.  Describe the information in the graph. Write at least 150 words.

To the right is a line graph which shows the number of farms and farm workers in the United States from 1910 – 2000.  Describe the information in the graph. Write at least 150 words.
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The line graph illustrates the
number
 of ranches and
the
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ranch employees in the US from 1910 until 2000.
Overall
,
it is clear that
in
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at
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 the
begining
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beginning
 of the
period
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period,
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 the total
number
 of farms and
employess
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employees
 in these farms is
hiegh
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huge
 compared with the end of
period
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the period
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.
In
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one
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the one
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 hand, The
number
 of
farmes
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farmers
farms
frames
 in 1910 was approximately 6
millions
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million
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 and the
number
 was
staedy
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steady
steadily
 until it reached a peak in 1935 which was about 7
millions
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million
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 farmers.
Then
 it decreased dramatically until reached a trough in 2000 which was about 2
millions
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million
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.
In
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other
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the other
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hands
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hand
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, The
number
 of farm workers
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was considerd
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considerd
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considered
 higher than the
number
 of farms which was approximately 14
miilion
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million
in
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 the start of the
period
.
Then
, It was fell sharply to reach a minimum point
at
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in
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 2000 which was about 3
millions
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million
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 except
two
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for two
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period
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periods
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, the first was
1930
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from 1930
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 to 1940 which in that time rose slightly and the second was
1950
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from 1950
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to1960
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to 1960
 which
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was considerd
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considerd
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considered
 stable during that time.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, period, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • steadily declined
  • sharp decrease
  • fluctuated
  • peaked
  • plateaued
  • consistent downward trend
  • correlation
  • inverse relationship
  • notable increase
  • plunge
  • coincide
  • drastically
  • proportionally
  • trends
  • timeline
  • significant change
  • marked difference
  • fell dramatically
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