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The graph below shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the percentage of four recycled materials from the time period of 1982 to 2010 in a country.
Overall
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, we can see
growth
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 in all components albeit at different rates and a very high
growth
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 was seen in
aluminium
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cans
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.
However
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, a minor rise was captured in other materials. At the beginning of the period, paper & cardboard and glass containers were at a very good proportion with 65% and 50% respectively. Paper & cardboard fluctuated till 1994, but
then
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 we saw a constant drop in its recycling
rate
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 with 70% in 2010.
Similarly
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, glass containers
also
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 dropped by 1990,
however
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, continuous
growth
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was
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 seen since
then
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 reaching 60%.So, minor
growth
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 of 5 and 10 per cent was there in these two components which were recycled at a very high
rate
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 in 1982.
On the other hand
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,
aluminium
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cans
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 and plastics recycling started in 1986 and 1990. But a significant rise in the recycling
rate
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 of
aluminium
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cans
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 was in years taking the number to 45% by 1990. Similar to
aluminium
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cans
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, plastics
also
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 started at a very low
rate
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 in 1990.
however
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, there was low
growth
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 in its percentage keeping it number to below 10% in 2010.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words growth, aluminium, cans, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • recycled
  • materials
  • increased
  • paper and cardboard
  • plastic
  • glass
  • metal
  • significant increase
  • relatively stable
  • fluctuating
  • period
  • starting
  • reaching
  • gradually increasing
  • remained low
  • experienced
  • showed
  • greatest
  • proportion
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