Write about the following topic: Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages. If these are not taught, many are at risk of dying out.  In your opinion, is it important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensure the survival of local languages and, if so, how? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

We are now living in the era of globalization.
Therefore
,
English
is a
language
which is spoken universally in all parts of the world. Nowadays, we see that
English
as a
language
is being taught more as compared to local
languages
in
school
. If it continues, many local
languages
will be diminished. In my opinion, It is very vital for every person to learn
English
as it has lots of pros but leaving behind local
languages
is not a recommended thing. We need to ensure the existence of local
languages
and we will discuss how
this
can be done. Learning
English
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language
gives us lots of benefits.
That is
why, from
school
time only it is added as a compulsory subject.
English
is a globally spoken
language
and is used everywhere. So, it opens
a doors
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for everyone to go
in
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to
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any country and visit
to
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any place and they will not face any
language
barrier because they know
English
and they can communicate with anyone.
Also
, more employment options will be available for students.
Moreover
, we can see that every year lots of students go to other countries to study as every university
is teaching
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the course in
English
language
. To illustrate, I am planning to move
in
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to
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Germany for my
further
studies in
English
speaking course. It is possible as
i
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learned
English
since my childhood and now I have good command
on
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of
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it. So, it is necessary
to
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for every person to learn
English
.
On the other hand
, we should not forget that we too local
languages
which need to
survived
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survive
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and they can only survive if we use them in our conversation. It
tell
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us about our rich and ancient culture.
Government
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should bring a law and make
local
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the local
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language
compulsory as a subject in
school
.
Moreover
, parents should motivate their
children
to speak local
languages
. Parents should
also
communicate with
children
in
native
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their native
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language
. At
our
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home, we should have a rule to talk only in
native
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the native
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language
. Norway country has
setup
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set up
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a very good example for
this
. Their native
language
Norwegian is a subject in schools and
children
are encouraged to speak in the native
language
only.
Also
, they provide
monthly
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stipend to
those
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elderly people, who
wants
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want
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to learn
Norwegian
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the Norwegian
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language
. These methods will definitely help to improve the situation corresponding to
local
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the local
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language
.
To conclude
,
English
is today's time is an important
language
to learn as it provides plentiful benefits like more employment, more options
of
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studying, can travel to any
places
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place
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without any
language
issues but
survival
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the survival
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of
local
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the local
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language
is equally important so they should be added in
school
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the school
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curriculum and
children
should
be encourage
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be encouraged
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to speak their native
language
.
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