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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The graph shows the
proportion
 of
aged
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the aged
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population
 in the
USA
, Sweden, and Japan for a decade.
Overall
, the
USA
 had the biggest
proportion
 among two other countries in 1940, but Japan will take
a
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the
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 lead for the biggest
population
 in the next 100 years. First of all, the
USA
 had the biggest percentage of aged people in 1940 with almost 10
percent
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per cent
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. The
proportion
 of elderly people in the
USA
 has gradually
increasing
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increased
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 and it is forecasted to reach almost a quarter of
overall
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the overall
show examples
population
 in 2040. Meanwhile, Sweden had a similar trend
with
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to
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USA
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the USA
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 where they
strated
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started
 the
proportion
 around 7
percent
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per cent
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 in 1940; afterwards, they overtook
USA
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the USA
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 until it is predicted to reach 25
percent
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per cent
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 of elderly people in the next decade.
On the other hand
, Japan had a
slightly
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slight
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 decline in the
proportion
 of
old
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the old
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population
 with less than 5
percent
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per cent
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 in 1960.
However
, the percentage keeps increasing and will have a massive incremental in the late
of
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apply
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2020s until
become
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becomes
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 the biggest percentage among other countries.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion, population, usa, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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