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The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use
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The following pie charts illustrate the percentage of
energy
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 used by an average Australian household and the portion of released greenhouse
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gas
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 which are
the
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subsequent to
this
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energy
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use
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, respectively. Australian household
energy
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use
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 consists of six categories, including water heat, refrigeration, heating, cooling, lighting, and other appliances. At first glance, it is evident that
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 heating has the lion's share of
the
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energy
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use
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, it forms only 15% of the entire
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 emissions. Another interesting point is that other appliances stand in
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second place for both the portion of
energy
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use
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 and discharge of greenhouse
gas
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. Looking at the details, water heating is utilized by 30% which is the second most used
energy
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 and sends out the
larger
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 amount of greenhouse
gas
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, followed by other appliances. Refrigeration, lighting and cooling have limited uses with 7%, 4%, and 2%, and release 14% and 8% of the produced
gas
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, in order. Cooling is the least used
energy
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 in Australian
household
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households
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, which
also
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 has the lowest rate of
gas
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releasing
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, gas, use with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Energy consumption
  • Greenhouse gas emissions
  • Sustainable practices
  • Energy efficiency
  • Renewable energy
  • Fossil fuels
  • Carbon footprint
  • Eco-friendly appliances
  • Insulation
  • Solar panels
  • Recycling
  • Climate change
  • Kilowatt-hour (kWh)
  • Emissions-intensive
  • Energy audit
  • Smart meters
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