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The graph below shows the percentage of people going to the gym every month in one country from 1990 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the percentage of people going to the gym every month in one country from 1990 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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 graph illustrates the different groups of
people
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 who go to the
gym
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 monthly in a country between 1990 and 2005. It is obvious that the proportion of the population who go to the
gym
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 monthly has increased in every
age
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 over
this
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 period. Generally, the younger
age
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group
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(18-24) and the elder
age
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group
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(35-44) dramatically changed from 2002 to 2010.
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, the other two groups constantly increased. By 2002, the percentage in the
group
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 of younger
age
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(18-24) had significantly increased from 9% to 55%, others gradually increased. After 2002 the younger
age
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group
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(18-24) had decreased relatively
then
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 going upwards.
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, the elder
group
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(35-44) had a generally opposite changing trend than the younger
age
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group
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(18-24). By 2010, the percentage of
people
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 going to a
gym
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 was highest with 55% in the
group
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 of younger
people
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, who narrowly transcended middle-aged
people
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 in 1993. The elder
group
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 of
people
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 who got the third highest percentage experienced dramatic changes. The lowest number of
people
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 who go to a
gym
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 monthly is older
people
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, which only had 11% in 2010.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, gym, age, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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