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In many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world.

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In recent times, most nations’ residents are able to go to the supermarkets and purchase the dishes which are produced around the whole world. I strongly believe that
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 is an affirmative improvement, because customers can experience the taste of foods that they have never seen and those products provide various choices of
meals
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 for humans.
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, the
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 that comes from different countries could be seen as interesting for the people who have not tried it. Since, the modern lifestyle of individuals
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 boring year by year they want to feel something new. Usually, they go abroad and try the traditional foods of that country, but
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, they cannot afford them there. In that case, they can experience it again from the shops that have the
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 from overseas.
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, in the past nobody
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Japanese
food
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 called ‘ramen’,
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 now ramen become a popular
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 in the daily life of people, and they can purchase it in every market.
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, sometimes residents suffer from the shortage of
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 in their nations.
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, it can be solved via the transfer of some
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 from overseas. It means that those dishes can be a solution to the global problem
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 as hunger.
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, the majority of countries in Africa have issues about ensuring citizens with
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 and water.
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, now the situation getting better thankful for the transportation of dishes around the world. In conclusion,
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 these provided reasons and examples, I am sure that buying
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 in stores nowadays is a favourable achievement for the whole world. Since it can be
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 for
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most people.

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coherence cohesion
Work on the logical structure of your essay. There were some points where the flow of ideas could be better organized. Try to ensure each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next.
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While you have provided relevant examples, try to make your arguments clearer and more comprehensive. Make sure that every point you make is fully developed.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion were well-presented, setting up the topic effectively and closing with a clear summary.
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You addressed the task effectively, discussing both the variety and the potential solution to food shortages provided by international foods in supermarkets.
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Your examples were relevant and helped to illustrate your points, particularly the ones about ramen and food shortages in Africa.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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