Nowadaysthe student have more opportunity to study abroad. what are the advantages and disadvanteges of this devolopment?

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Nowadays, the

majorty

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majority

students

are looking forward

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to studing

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studing

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studying

abroad. especially studying in the USA, the UK and Australia. They can study abroad by getting

scholarship

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or with personal financing.

However

, the decision

of studying

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to study

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foreign

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a foreign

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country

has several advantages and

disadvanteges

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disadvantages

which will

be discuss

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this

essay. There are several

benefit

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benefits

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of studying out of your home

country

. The most important one is

higher

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oppurtunity

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opportunity

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getting

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better

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job position, because of the strong certification

ofrom

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from

international

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an international

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university.

Also

, studying abroad

enable

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students

from

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engagement

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engage

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in new

culture

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cultures

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and New relationships

in addition

expand

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their

perceptiens

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perceptions

Further

mare

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, living in

other

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another

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country

makes the

students

depend on

themselfs

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themselves

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and have a strong personality.

On the other hand

studing

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studying

abroud

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abroad

had a lot of difficulties.

For instance

, staying away from

familiy

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family

, home and friends.

therefore

, Foreign

students

sufer fram

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suffer from

losing stability and

facing

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number

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a number

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of challenges especially financially. They have to

mange

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manage

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thier

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their

money and expenses. So, they need to find a part-time job to

gat

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get

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some money.

As a

result

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they

strugle

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struggle

with time management between

studing

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studying

and working. In my

opining

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opinion

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hard warking

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hard-working

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student

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students

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can overcome these difficulties. In my

country

, thousands of

students

travel every year

for studying

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abroad.

Also

, some jobs

required

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the employee to go for

advance

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study abroad. In my point of view, studying abroad is so

impratant

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important

and its advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Nowadaysthe student have more opportunity to study abroad. what are the advantages and disadvanteges of this devolopment?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

The Internet has provided great benefits, but at the same time, it has also created new problems and inequalities. it possible to control some of these problems?

Some people think most crime is the result of circumstances. Otthers believes that most crime is cused by people who are bad by nature. Discuss both view and give your own opinion.

In many professional sports, there is an increase in the number of athletes using banned substances to improve their performance. What are the causes? What are the solutions?

Some people think it is more important for the government to spend public money on promoting a healthy lifestyle in order to prevent illness than to spend it on the treatment of people who are already ill. To what extent do you agree or disagree?