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The table and charts below give informations on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant

The table and charts below give informations on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant
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The table shows the
sources
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 of
budget
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 in 2017 and 2018,
while
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 the pie charts illustrate the data on
money
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 expenditure in the same years.
Overall
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, the total
budget
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 was higher in 2018 including income by each of the
sources
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,
while
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 salaries were paid more in 2017,
although
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 the
budget
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 was less than in 2018.
Additionally
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, the same amount of
money
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 was spent on buildings and transport.
Overall
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, the total
budget
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 in 2017 was equal to 304.7
million
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pounds
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, which was mostly formed by the national government as the main source, particularly 175.5
million
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pounds
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were
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earned by them. Local taxes brought 91.2
million
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pounds
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,
while
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 the least role belonged to other
sources
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such
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 as grants and many others, which constituted 38
million
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pounds
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.
However
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, there was no sharp difference in the budgets of 2017 and 2018, as in 2018 the
budget
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 made up 318.6
million
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pounds
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.
Moreover
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, the same trend in formation was observed in 2018, as the national government played the crucial role of 177.8
million
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pounds
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, meanwhile, other
sources
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 presented 38.5
million
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pounds
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.
It is clear that
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 in both years
money
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 was mostly spent on the salaries of staff and officers, exactly 75% and 69% respectively in 2017 and 2018.
Although
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 more
money
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 was spent on technology in 2018, when it constituted 14%,
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8% in 2017, the same contribution of 17% was seen on buildings and transport in both years.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although, overall, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sources, budget, money, million, pounds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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