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The bar chart shows the divorce rates in two European countries from 2011 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the divorce rates in two European countries from 2011 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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demonistrate
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demonstrates
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 the
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 statistics between
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finland
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 and
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sweden
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 from
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year
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 2011 to
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year
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 2015.
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finland
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 had
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the lowest
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divorce
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 percentage
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 2012
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almost 33%
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divorce
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rate
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 recorded in
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sweden
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 was in 2012
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around 49%. the
divorce
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rate
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finland
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was reaching
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 almost 37% in
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year
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 2011 and slightly decreased to 31% in 2012.
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,
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finland
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 recorded increasing in
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divorce
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rate
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in
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yearly
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a yearly
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 basis from
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year
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 2013 until
end
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the end
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 of 2015.
on the other hand
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sweden
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divorce
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rate
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 was shown to be around 43% in 2011 and slightly increased to the peak by reaching 49% in 2012. it is worth
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 that
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sweden
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 had an improvement in
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divorce
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the divorce
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rate
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continues
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 decline in the
divorce
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rate
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 from years 2013 until end of
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year
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 2015. in
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conclusion
,
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year
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 2012 is considered the lowest
divorce
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rate
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 for
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finland
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Finland
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 and
highest
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the highest
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 for
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sweden
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 which shows the highest gap between
two
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 countries throughout the 5 years.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words divorce, finland, sweden, year, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • divorce rates
  • fluctuate
  • increase
  • decrease
  • peak
  • trough
  • trend
  • notable
  • significant
  • substantial
  • higher
  • lower
  • comparison
  • consistent
  • vary
  • percent
  • overall
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