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The bar chart shows the divorce rates in two European countries from 2011 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the divorce rates in two European countries from 2011 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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the chart
demonistrate
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demonstrates
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 the
divorce
 statistics between
finland
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Finland
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 and
sweden
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Sweden
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 from
year
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the year
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 2011 to
year
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 2015.
finland
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Finland
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 had
lowest
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the lowest
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divorce
 percentage
on
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in
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 2012
by
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apply
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almost 33%
while
 the highest
divorce
rate
 recorded in
sweden
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Sweden
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 was in 2012
by
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around 49%. the
divorce
rate
 in
finland
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Finland
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was reaching
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reached
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 almost 37% in
year
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the year
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 2011 and slightly decreased to 31% in 2012.
afterword
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,
finland
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Finland
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 recorded increasing in
divorce
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the divorce
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rate
in
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on
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yearly
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a yearly
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 basis from
year
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the year
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 2013 until
end
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the end
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 of 2015.
on the other hand
,
sweden
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Sweden
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divorce
rate
 was shown to be around 43% in 2011 and slightly increased to the peak by reaching 49% in 2012. it is worth
to mention
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mentioning
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 that
sweden
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Sweden
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 had an improvement in
divorce
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the divorce
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rate
 by
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a continues
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continues
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continuous
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 decline in the
divorce
rate
 from years 2013 until end of
year
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the year
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 2015. in
conclution
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conclusion
,
year
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the year
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 2012 is considered the lowest
divorce
rate
 for
finland
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Finland
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 and
highest
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the highest
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 for
sweden
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Sweden
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 which shows the highest gap between
two
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the two
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 countries throughout the 5 years.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words divorce, finland, sweden, year, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • divorce rates
  • fluctuate
  • increase
  • decrease
  • peak
  • trough
  • trend
  • notable
  • significant
  • substantial
  • higher
  • lower
  • comparison
  • consistent
  • vary
  • percent
  • overall
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