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The bar chart shows the divorce rates in two European countries from 2011 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the divorce rates in two European countries from 2011 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart
illustrit
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illustrates
the
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divorce
 in two
Eurpean Contries
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European countries
Finland
 and
sweden
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Sweden
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. When you go over the bar it seems that the highest
divorce
 rate was in
swedan
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Sweden
 in 2012
reaches
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 50%
where
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whereas
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 the lowest was in 2015 35% . if we move to
Finland
 the highest
percent
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 where in 2015
as
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at
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 40 and 41% in 2014 where the lowest was in 2012
32
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at 32
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%.
in
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 2013
Finland
reaches
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reached
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to
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45 %
where
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whereas
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Swedan
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the Swedan
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 percentage was 39%.
However
,
Finland
showes
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shows
 the
precetnage
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percentage
 of
divorce
 more
low
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lower
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 than
Finland
 in all the years the
percentiges
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percentages
percentage
 shows that the
numbers
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is
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are
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 between 41 to 32% ,
in
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On
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 the other hand
swedan
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Sweden
 is much way more
divorce
 rate where the
numbers
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number
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are
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is
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 between 50 to 45% that seems really bad . In conclusion ,
overall
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the overall
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 bar between the year
of
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apply
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2011 and 2015
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in sweden
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sweden
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Sweden
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 is the highest in all the years
comparing
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compared
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 to
sweden
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Sweden
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.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words divorce, finland with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "reaches" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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  • divorce rates
  • fluctuate
  • increase
  • decrease
  • peak
  • trough
  • trend
  • notable
  • significant
  • substantial
  • higher
  • lower
  • comparison
  • consistent
  • vary
  • percent
  • overall
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