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School uniforms should be mandatory in all schools. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is inevitable thought that
schools
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 must
be made
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make
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compulsory
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it compulsory
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to
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for
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students
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 to wear
school
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 attire.
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 essay believes that
although
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school
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uniforms
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 create an essence of equality among
students
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,
its
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their
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 negative aspects like
burden
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the burden
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 on parents to buy a new uniform cannot be neglected.
School
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uniforms
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, which
is
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are
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wear
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worn
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 by
students
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everyday
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every day
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 at
school
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brings
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bring
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 equality
,
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apply
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 because
school
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 is a place where
students
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 from different cultures,
community
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communities
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 and
age
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ages
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 are learned together without facing any discrimination on
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the prospective
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prospective
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perspective
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 of clothing.
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 makes
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students
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students'
student's
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life
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lives
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 happy, regardless
focusing
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of focusing
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 on appearance, maintaining a good balance between an academic score and personal life, thereby
enhances
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enhancing
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 quality
life
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of life
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.
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, in India, it is found that a gap of social status is reduced in all
schools
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 as
students
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 are more focused on studies
,
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apply
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while
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 comparing each other in terms of fashion.
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,
school
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 uniform creates
burden
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a burden
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 on parent's shoulders. The reason is that all
schools
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has
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have
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 different policies,
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 as different
uniforms
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 on different
week days
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weekdays
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, which not only creates stress on parent's
mind
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minds
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,
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apply
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 but
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also
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is also
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 financially expensive.
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,
the
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apply
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most parents in southern Africa cannot be able to afford one set of
uniforms
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to
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for
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 their children because of monetary
problem
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problems
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.
This
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 essay,
therefore
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, argues that, because of
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the usage
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 of different sets of
uniforms
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 in one week,
schools
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’
uniforms
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 should not be made compulsory in all
schools
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. In conclusion, for
students
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 to bring equality among themselves,
although
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 they can
be benefitted
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benefit
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by
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from
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 wearing
school
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uniforms
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,
this
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 essay believes that both positive and negative aspects of making
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schools uniform
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school uniforms
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 mandatory cannot be ignored.

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task achievement
Ensure that your thesis statement (introduction) reflects both the positive and negative aspects you will discuss in your essay, and that your conclusion clearly summarizes your stance.
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Proofread your essay for grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. This will help your ideas come across more clearly.
coherence cohesion
Work on the logical flow between sentences and paragraphs. Transitional phrases can help make connections clearer.
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Where possible, bring forth more specific examples and evidence to support your points. This will make your arguments stronger and more convincing.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea or argument. This will help improve the clarity and coherence of your writing.
task achievement
You have presented a balanced viewpoint by considering both the positive and negative aspects of the topic, which demonstrates ability to think critically.
task achievement
The essay addresses the topic and provides relevant examples, which are important for supporting your points.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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