School uniforms should be mandatory in all schools. Do you agree or disagree?
It is inevitable thought that
schools
must be made
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make
compulsory
Correct pronoun usage
it compulsory
to
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for
students
to wear school
attire. This
essay believes that although
school
uniforms
create an essence of equality among students
, its
negative aspects like Correct pronoun usage
their
burden
on parents to buy a new uniform cannot be neglected.
Correct article usage
the burden
School
uniforms
, which is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
wear
by Wrong verb form
worn
students
everyday
at Replace the word
every day
school
brings
equalityCorrect subject-verb agreement
bring
,
because Remove the comma
apply
school
is a place where students
from different cultures, community
and Fix the agreement mistake
communities
age
are learned together without facing any discrimination on Fix the agreement mistake
ages
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the prospective
prospective
of clothing. Correct your spelling
perspective
This
makes students
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students'
student's
life
happy, regardless Fix the agreement mistake
lives
focusing
on appearance, maintaining a good balance between an academic score and personal life, thereby Change preposition
of focusing
enhances
quality Wrong verb form
enhancing
life
. Change preposition
of life
For example
, in India, it is found that a gap of social status is reduced in all schools
as students
are more focused on studies,
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apply
while
comparing each other in terms of fashion.
However
, school
uniform creates burden
on parent's shoulders. The reason is that all Add an article
a burden
schools
has
different policies, Change the verb form
have
such
as different uniforms
on different week days
, which not only creates stress on parent's Correct your spelling
weekdays
mind
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minds
,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
financially expensive. Add a missing verb
is also
For instance
, the
most parents in southern Africa cannot be able to afford one set of Correct article usage
apply
uniforms
to
their children because of monetary Change preposition
for
problem
. Fix the agreement mistake
problems
This
essay, therefore
, argues that, because of usage
of different sets of Correct article usage
the usage
uniforms
in one week, schools
’ uniforms
should not be made compulsory in all schools
.
In conclusion, for students
to bring equality among themselves, although
they can be benefitted
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benefit
by
wearing Change preposition
from
school
uniforms
, this
essay believes that both positive and negative aspects of making schools uniform
mandatory cannot be ignored.Fix the agreement mistake
school uniforms
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