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As the internet becomes more popular, newspapers are becoming a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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The Internet
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 is more famous than the newspapers which are now outdated.
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low
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the low
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cost
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 of access to the
enews
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news
 and speedy distribution of the
news
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.
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, across the world
people
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 are able to access
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the
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 at low
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.
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 development of
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the WWW
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 and social
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media
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,
people
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 can read the
news
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 at
low
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a low
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cost
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 or at zero
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 in the home since they
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are
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 not required to travel to purchase new papers,
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people
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 are able to save time by avoiding travel and money by way of saving fuel
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cost
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costs
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.
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, recent research in
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the UK
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 concluded that
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the majority
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 of the population is using online
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news
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 than newspapers
due to
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cost
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.
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,
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news
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 has
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a higher
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 speed of distribution of a particular
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 than
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news paper
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newspaper
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.
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news
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has
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 not
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to follow
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a typical production process which
take
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 some time to deliver the product to
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the final
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 customer
.the
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the
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the
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news
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 distribution is high and
the
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people
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 around the world are able to access the
new
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news
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 through the internet
by
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 a single click.
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,
people
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 are able to share
those
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the
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news
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 using their relatives using the internet.
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, recent research in Canada concluded that the majority of
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 circulated via online
platform
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platforms
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 have
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a large
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large
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larger
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 number of audience than manual newspapers.
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, the
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news papers
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newspapers
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 are expired now
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 technological revolution products like enews. Question

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Your essay addresses the topic accurately and maintains focus on the statement provided.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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