IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6.5

The table presents information about university-level academic staff in one country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table presents information about university-level academic staff in one country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The table graph illustrates data about third-level education
staff
Use synonyms
 by six different courses in two
spaceific
Correct your spelling
specific
 years ( 2005 and 2013).
Overall
Linking Words
, all university
staff
Use synonyms
Use synonyms
number
Fix the agreement mistake
numbers
show examples
 increased over the entire period with the biggest change in architecture, except the
staff
Use synonyms
number
Use synonyms
 in agriculture and education decreased slightly.
Furthermore
Linking Words
, the biggest
number
Use synonyms
 of
staff
Use synonyms
 was in medicine throughout the period,
while
Linking Words
 the lowest
number
Use synonyms
 of
staff
Use synonyms
 was in agriculture. In terms of medicine, they had the highest
number
Use synonyms
 of
staff
Use synonyms
 in 2005 and 2013
by
Change preposition
apply
show examples
30664 and 36868 respectively, and the second highest
number
Use synonyms
 of employees was in business
started
Wrong verb form
starting
show examples
 at 23128 and
rose
Wrong verb form
rising
show examples
 to 28769 in 2013.
While
Linking Words
 architecture's
staff
Use synonyms
 had a significant change from 2380 in 2005 to 3204 in the
last
Linking Words
 year,
similarly
Linking Words
, art's
staff
Use synonyms
number
Use synonyms
 changed by 28,18%. With regard to sciences and humanities, in 2005 they had ( 19064 and 12088 respectively)
then
Linking Words
 increased to ( 22092 and 13777 respectively) in 2013.
Moreover
Linking Words
,
Correct article usage
the tengineering
show examples
tengineering
Correct your spelling
engineering
, agriculture and education employee
number
Use synonyms
was
Change the verb form
were
show examples
 relatively stable.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
▼
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words staff, number with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
▼
Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender distribution
  • academic staff
  • faculties
  • ratios
  • STEM (Science, Technology, Engineering, Mathematics)
  • dominance
  • balance
  • disparities
  • hiring practices
  • overview
What to do next:
Look at other essays: