The table presents information about university-level academic staff in one country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table presents information about university-level academic staff in one country.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table graph illustrates data about third-level education
staff
by six different courses in two
spaceific
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specific
years ( 2005 and 2013).
Overall
, all university
staff
number
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increased over the entire period with the biggest change in architecture, except the
staff
number
in agriculture and education decreased slightly.
Furthermore
, the biggest
number
of
staff
was in medicine throughout the period,
while
the lowest
number
of
staff
was in agriculture. In terms of medicine, they had the highest
number
of
staff
in 2005 and 2013
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30664 and 36868 respectively, and the second highest
number
of employees was in business
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at 23128 and
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to 28769 in 2013.
While
architecture's
staff
had a significant change from 2380 in 2005 to 3204 in the
last
year,
similarly
, art's
staff
number
changed by 28,18%. With regard to sciences and humanities, in 2005 they had ( 19064 and 12088 respectively)
then
increased to ( 22092 and 13777 respectively) in 2013.
Moreover
,
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tengineering
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engineering
, agriculture and education employee
number
was
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relatively stable.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words staff, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender distribution
  • academic staff
  • faculties
  • ratios
  • STEM (Science, Technology, Engineering, Mathematics)
  • dominance
  • balance
  • disparities
  • hiring practices
  • overview
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