‏Some companies sponsor sport as a way to advertise themselves. Some people think it is good for the world of sports, while others think there are disadvantages. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In our world, there are a lot of good things, these things affect our
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Sport
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sponsors
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of
the
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these things. Some people think it is a positive development
while
others disagree and think it may lead to adverse ramifications,
this
essay will discuss both
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of
views
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and
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opinion
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First of all, sponsoring has a lot of financial benefits
specially
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on
sports
. To explain that
,
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many people in the world like watching
sports
such
as football ,
moreover
, with more people watching many benefits for
the
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companies
.
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to that. Promoting
by
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sports
have
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many opportunities
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the
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society. to illustrate that, many
companies
had
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been successful
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promoting themselves on television or social media.
For instance
,
company
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a company
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like PEPSI
it
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is one of the largest
companies
in the world
they
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sponsored
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tournaments like
Champions
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league
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On the other hand
,
to
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many ads could become
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annoying thing for the viewer . To explain why, when the company chooses
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time to promote something.as an example
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that ,
some time
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when I’m watching
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a sport
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sport
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game they cut the game to promote
for
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some drink I generally feel annoyed with that not only that but ,The involvement of sponsors can
also
put pressure on the athletes, as an
explantion
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explanation
for that sponsor can demand a certain result or expect athletes
an a
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way that benefits there brand
witch
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which
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can lead to stress and problems .
Finally
,after
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analysis of both points of
views
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. I believe that
,
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sponsorship in
sports
can be a positive force, but only when they managed responsibly ,since the
companies
should try to promote something that
have
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value
on
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sports
.
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grammar
Work on sentence structure and grammar to avoid errors that could confuse the reader. Ensure subject-verb agreement and proper usage of conjunctions.
task response
Clarify and develop your main points in greater detail. Avoid vague statements and ensure each point is supported with clear reasoning and specific examples.
coherence
Improve the logical flow between sentences and paragraphs. Use cohesive devices like linking words more effectively to ensure a smooth transition between points.
coherence
The introduction and conclusion are present, but they could be more impactful. Consider providing a stronger opening statement and a more robust conclusion.
task response
You have successfully addressed both views in the essay, providing a balanced discussion on the topic.
examples
The essay includes some relevant examples that support your arguments, such as the reference to PEPSI and football tournaments.

Your opinion

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