Some companies sponsor sport as a way to advertise themselves. Some people think it is good for the world of sports, while others think there are disadvantages. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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others disagree and think it may lead to adverse ramifications, Linking Words
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views
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give
opinion
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an opinion
the opinion
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sports
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many people in the world like watching Remove the comma
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sports
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as football , Linking Words
moreover
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the
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apply
companies
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to that. Promoting Linking Words
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sports
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have
many opportunities Correct subject-verb agreement
has
to
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for
the
society. to illustrate that, many Correct article usage
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companies
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had
been successful Wrong verb form
have
by
promoting themselves on television or social media. Change preposition
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company
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a company
it
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companies
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they
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sponsors
Champions
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the Champions
league
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an
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that , Change preposition
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some time
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sometime
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a sport
sport
game they cut the game to promote Change the noun form
sports
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also
put pressure on the athletes, as an Linking Words
explantion
for that sponsor can demand a certain result or expect athletes Correct your spelling
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way that benefits there brand Choose an article
a
witch
can lead to stress and problems .
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which
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detailed
analysis of both points of Add an article
a detailed
views
. I believe that Fix the agreement mistake
view
,
sponsorship in Remove the comma
apply
sports
can be a positive force, but only when they managed responsibly ,since the Use synonyms
companies
should try to promote something that Use synonyms
have
value Change the verb form
has
on
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in
sports
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grammar
Work on sentence structure and grammar to avoid errors that could confuse the reader. Ensure subject-verb agreement and proper usage of conjunctions.
task response
Clarify and develop your main points in greater detail. Avoid vague statements and ensure each point is supported with clear reasoning and specific examples.
coherence
Improve the logical flow between sentences and paragraphs. Use cohesive devices like linking words more effectively to ensure a smooth transition between points.
coherence
The introduction and conclusion are present, but they could be more impactful. Consider providing a stronger opening statement and a more robust conclusion.
task response
You have successfully addressed both views in the essay, providing a balanced discussion on the topic.
examples
The essay includes some relevant examples that support your arguments, such as the reference to PEPSI and football tournaments.
Your opinion
Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.
If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.
Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.
Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:
...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?