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The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social center in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social center in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
A glance a the graph provided shows information about the number of
participants
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 for various activities at a social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. The activities consisted of a film club, Martial arts, Amateur dramatics, Table tennis and Musical performances.
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, From the year 2000 to 2005 film club was at the top of the list with almost 65
participants
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 in martial arts with some fluctuations. Amateur dramatics and Table tennis remained stable until 2005 but
then
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 experienced a sudden boost and a drop until the year 2020. Musical performances faced a downfall until 2005 when there were 0
participants
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 but after showed an upward trend reaching approximately 20
participants
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 by the year 2020

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words participants with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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