The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates the average change in the
price
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of
copper
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, nickel and
zinc
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for each
month
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threw 2014.
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, we can see that the nickel was by far the highest percentage change at the beginning of the
year
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but ended as the lowest
one
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of the three
at the end
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of the
year
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.
While
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,
zinc
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started the
year
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with the lowest percentage change,
although
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it ended
on
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at
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the highest point.
Copper
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price
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prices
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had a limited range of variation.  In January the
price
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of nickle was up six per
cent
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, but by the
middel
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middle
of the
year
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at
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in
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june
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June
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it dropped to negative 3,
finally
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copper
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ended the
year
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with
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one
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a one
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per
cent
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rise.
Copper
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started with
two
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a two
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per
cent
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increase and the
price
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started dropping for the next six
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month
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months
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to reach slightly below negative
one
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per
cent
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.
However
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, the
price
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raised
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rose
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at
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in
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the second half of the
year
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ending
it
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apply
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with
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at
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a little below two
percen
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per cent
.
Zinc
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started
with
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at
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one
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percent
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per cent
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in January
raiseed
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raised
alittle
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a little
little
to reach two per
cent
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in the next
month
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then
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it
started
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started to
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reduce slowly until
june
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June
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reached negative
one
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and continued the next four
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month
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months
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with limited movement,
Zinc
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ended the
last
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quarter of the
year
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with a
slightly
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slight
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increase
reaced
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reached
2
percent
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per cent
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as the highest
one
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of the three.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words price, copper, zinc, month, year, one, cent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "change" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuate
  • volatile
  • stability
  • peak
  • trough
  • increment
  • decrement
  • steady
  • gradual
  • sharp
  • increase
  • decrease
  • month-on-month
  • average monthly change
  • commodity
  • benchmark
  • trend
  • precipitous
  • plateau
  • significant
  • marginal
  • surge
  • dip
  • plummet
  • soar
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