The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates the average change in the
price
of
copper
, nickel and
zinc
for each
month
threw 2014.
Overall
, we can see that the nickel was by far the highest percentage change at the beginning of the
year
but ended as the lowest
one
of the three
at the end
of the
year
.
While
,
zinc
started the
year
with the lowest percentage change,
although
it ended
on
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the highest point.
Copper
price
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prices
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had a limited range of variation.  In January the
price
of nickle was up six per
cent
, but by the
middel
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middle
of the
year
at
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in
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june
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June
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it dropped to negative 3,
finally
copper
ended the
year
with
one
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a one
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per
cent
rise.
Copper
started with
two
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a two
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per
cent
increase and the
price
started dropping for the next six
month
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months
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to reach slightly below negative
one
per
cent
.
However
, the
price
raised
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at
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in
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the second half of the
year
ending
it
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apply
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with
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a little below two
percen
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per cent
.
Zinc
started
with
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at
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one
percent
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per cent
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in January
raiseed
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raised
alittle
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a little
little
to reach two per
cent
in the next
month
then
it
started
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reduce slowly until
june
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June
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reached negative
one
and continued the next four
month
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months
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with limited movement,
Zinc
ended the
last
quarter of the
year
with a
slightly
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increase
reaced
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reached
2
percent
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per cent
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as the highest
one
of the three.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words price, copper, zinc, month, year, one, cent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "change" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.

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