Recently, your position in the company has changed, and accordingly, you are required to write a letter to ask for some corresponding training programs that contains the following information: • What was your last position? • What qualities does your new position require? • How does the training help you in your new position?
Dear Sir,
I hope
this
letter finds you in best of the spirits and radiant health. I am writing this
letter to let you know that I am
promoted Wrong verb form
have been
as
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to
an
Assistant Manager in Correct article usage
apply
Customer
Care department recently, and I want to join a course before my joining Correct article usage
the Customer
at
the new post. Previously, I Change preposition
apply
was working
as an Assistant Quality Assurance Manager, Wrong verb form
worked
therefore
, I do not have much experience in dealing Change preposition
with customer's
customer's
and their complaints.
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customers
This
new position requires a few traits to do the job efficiently. First,
how to interact with the customers. Second,
how to operate the software programs used in the department. Lastly
, how to solve issues in given
time frame. Add an article
the given
a given
Therefore
, I need to learn these things under an experienced guide.
As a matter of fact, like
I have mentioned before Correct word choice
as
that
I have little experience of working Correct word choice
apply
of
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in
this
department, hence
, this
training program will enables
me to perform the job duties in an efficient way. Change the verb form
enable
Moreover
, it will boost my moral
if I know how to handle customers directly. I hope you will allow me to enrol, in order to, enhance my proficiency.
I am looking forward to hearing from you.
Yours faithfully,
Jatinder.Correct your spelling
morale
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grammar
Ensure consistent use of the apostrophe (e.g., "customer's" should be "customers'" in this context).
coherence
Connect sentences and paragraphs more cohesively using linking words and phrases for smoother transitions.
coherence
Avoid redundancy, like using "in order to" when "to" suffices (e.g., "allow me to enroll (in order to enhance) my proficiency").
task achievement
The letter clearly explains the past position as well as the requirements of the new position, meeting the task's needs.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is polite and professional, suitable for formal communication.
coherence and cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriately formal.
coherence and cohesion
Paragraphs generally focus on single ideas, clarifying the structure.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite