Recently, your position in the company has changed, and accordingly, you are required to write a letter to ask for some corresponding training programs that contains the following information: • What was your last position? • What qualities does your new position require? • How does the training help you in your new position?

Dear Sir, I hope
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letter finds you in best of the spirits and radiant health. I am writing
this
letter to let you know that I
am
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promoted
as
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an
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Assistant Manager in
Customer
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Care department recently, and I want to join a course before my joining
at
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the new post. Previously, I
was working
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as an Assistant Quality Assurance Manager,
therefore
, I do not have much experience in dealing
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with customer's
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customer's
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customers
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and their complaints.
This
new position requires a few traits to do the job efficiently.
First,
how to interact with the customers.
Second,
how to operate the software programs used in the department.
Lastly
, how to solve issues in
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time frame.
Therefore
, I need to learn these things under an experienced guide. As a matter of fact,
like
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I have mentioned before
that
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I have little experience of working
of
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this
department,
hence
,
this
training program will
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me to perform the job duties in an efficient way.
Moreover
, it will boost my
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if I know how to handle customers directly. I hope you will allow me to enrol, in order to, enhance my proficiency. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Jatinder.
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grammar
Ensure consistent use of the apostrophe (e.g., "customer's" should be "customers'" in this context).
coherence
Connect sentences and paragraphs more cohesively using linking words and phrases for smoother transitions.
coherence
Avoid redundancy, like using "in order to" when "to" suffices (e.g., "allow me to enroll (in order to enhance) my proficiency").
task achievement
The letter clearly explains the past position as well as the requirements of the new position, meeting the task's needs.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is polite and professional, suitable for formal communication.
coherence and cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriately formal.
coherence and cohesion
Paragraphs generally focus on single ideas, clarifying the structure.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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